I really enjoyed this poem. I would like to think the author drew inspiration from maybe her grandmother when she was writing it. The poem describes an older lady going about making a cake and eventually potting plants. I liked how the author chose to write the poem from the viewpoint of the hands; they become the perfect storytellers. I actually started reading the poem before I read the title and I got really confused; however, once I read the title it made sense, so kudos to the author for picking an appropriate title that prepared readers. It is evident the author made an effort to produce a clear image to the audience. I especially like the use of the words "curled" and "clutched" because when I read them I could see the hand performing the action of stirring batter or reaching in the refrigerator for milk. The Gone With the Wind reference also helps give the reader an idea about the owner of the hands; clearly she is Southern and perhaps proper.
The only thing I would change about this poem is a few word choices. Sometimes, the poem seemed a little wordy. For example "sunshine, yellow yolk" is redundant. The word "sunshine" usually lets people know something is yellow, so it isn't necessary for both words to be used. Another instance occurs in the line "We hands, both the left and right.." Since the word "hands" was used the reader will know it's both the left and the right hand, so that doesn't need to be clarified. Also I'm not entirely sure if the scene with the plants is needed. Since a lot of the poem is dedicated to the kitchen scene, the flower scene seems a little random, and then it ends abruptly. Maybe the author could replace the lines about plotting plants by expanding on the kitchen some more to finish out the poem.
On a more personal note, this reminded me a lot of my great-grandmother so that made me smile :)
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